Masses of crimson and amber-tinted clouds painted the sky as the sun waltzed in from the horizon, decorating the sparkling lake with millions of bright, dazzling rays. The warm, gentle touch of sunlight bathed the wooden boat in a shimmering array of gold. I sat down softly on the bank as the sun wrapped around me like a warm blanket, comforting me.
A golden hue glinted from the still blue water, as it mirrored the crimson sky above it. As i watched, a tiny drop of dew fell into the water with a splash, causing the perfect image of the sky to shimmer briefly in ripples of gold. I stared vacantly into the horizon as the lake calmed, displaying the serene picture once more.
I smiled. All was calm.
I would grade you a A-. As I think that although you have good descriptive phrases, the picture doesn't exactly fit the paragraph because some of the phrases are not reflected in the picture. Like there aren't exactly 'rays' of light. However, I can feel the atmosphere you try to evoke in the reader and overall, it is quite nice.
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